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The creature stopped for a second, apparently recovering from the impact. This was enough for the guards to dash towards him from both sides with spears at the ready. It was clear that all the actions were well-rehearsed and most likely worked out in real situations more than once. While several spears slipped on the monster's sturdy skin without harming it, the others pierced the thinner places between the bulging growths. All the spears of the guards had crossbars at the tips, which prevented the further penetration of spears into the body. The guards tried to strike closer to the creature's head so that it could not attack with its all-destructive mouth plates.

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kjcoffin's picture
I learn : Spanish (Intermediate)
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The creature stopped for a second, apparently recovering from the impact. This was enough for the guards to dash towards him from both sides with spears at the at the first sign of being ready. It was clear that all the their actions were well-rehearsed and most likely worked out in real situations more than once. While several spears slipped on the monster's sturdy skin without harming it, the others pierced the thinner places between the bulging growths. All the spears of the guards had crossbars at the tips, which prevented the further penetration of spears into the body. The guards tried to strike closer to the creature's head so that it could not attack with its all-destructive mouth plates.

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I learn : English (Beginner)
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Thank you, Kealin!

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I learn : Chinese (Beginner) French (Beginner) German (Beginner) Portuguese (Beginner) Spanish (Beginner) Arabic (Beginner)
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Hi Oleks,

The guards must be very brave. They must risk their own lives to defeat this gruesome creature! I would certainly not be a guard!

With regards to your written and spoken English, I just have a couple of comments to add...

  • and most likely worked out in real situations more than once - and most likely had worked out in real situations more than once (when talking about an event in the past that happened before another, you should use the past perfect tense. )
  •  While several spears slipped on the monster's sturdy skin without harming it -  While several spears slipped onto the monster's sturdy skin without harming it
  • All the spears of the guards - All the guards' spears. (spears of the guards is not grammatically incorrect, but normally (when we speak about objects belonging to people) we form the possessive like this.
  • all-destructive mouth plates. - I have not heard of the phrase "all-destructive" before. I would instead use an adjective like "deadly or lethal mouth plates".
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Oleks :
I learn : English (Beginner)
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Hi Ed! Thank you! I will need to use the past perfect tense more.

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Ros Watson's picture
I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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Hi Oleks - Ed has done a great job at correcting your post.  It's very well written and you paint a vivid picture of this amazing monster!!  I was wondering what your exact meaning of 'worked out' was.  If it's 'devised' then it should remain part of the earlier sentence - so you could say 'well rehearsed and had most likely been worked out in real situations more than once'.  I have picked up a couple of words which are not quite pronounced correctly:  spears and tips.  I've uploaded these.  Well done!  Ros

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Oleks :
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Hi Ros! Thank you for your comment and audio! By "worked out" I meant "brought to mastery" or "to perfection" in repetitive situations. I think you are right in this case and I had to write "been worked out".

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