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Hi Oleks,

I loved the word "mongrel" to describe...

Thursday, December 5, 2019 - 21:41
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Hi Oleks,

I cannot understand why on earth Ilak...

Thursday, December 5, 2019 - 21:29
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Hi Oleks

Ilak was incredibly lucky then!!!

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Thursday, December 5, 2019 - 21:16
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Thursday, December 5, 2019 - 21:08

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He had few chances against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill his assailant personally, so I did not make fatal strikes, but only distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.

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Aliakbar Majidi's picture
I learn : French (Beginner) Persian (Expert) Spanish (Beginner)
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Hi Oleks, well done!

He had few chances of winning, fighting against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill his assailant personally, so I did not make fatal strikes strokes, but only distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.

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Hi Ali! Thank you!

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Ros Watson's picture
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Your text had no mistakes.  I just made a couple of 'tweaks' to make it sound more natural!  Well done and good audio too!

He had few chances little chance against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill  [or you could say 'would take pleasure in killing'] his assailant personally, so I did not make any fatal strikes, but only just distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.

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Hi Ros! Thank you for your improvements to this text!

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He had few chances against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill his assailant personally, so I did not make fatal strikes and only distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.

 

nice job

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Hi Kealin! Thank you!

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edhutchins88's picture
I learn : Chinese (Beginner) French (Beginner) German (Beginner) Portuguese (Beginner) Spanish (Beginner) Arabic (Beginner)
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Hi Oleks,

Another brutal, gory extract which I loved reading!

I can't really think of anything that needs to be corrected here! Well done!

Perhaps you could instead (instead of saying "directed the final blow with a crowbar ") say dealt the final blow with a crossbar.

In my opinion it sounds slightly more "natural".

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Hi Ed! Thank you! I am glad that you like my story. I think you are right: "dealt the final blow" sounds more natural.

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