TOURISM

I believe that tourism makes more good to society than harm, because It  bring local development, cultural changes, economic grows. It opens   doors for a new way to see and connect the world.  To make a sustainable tourism, local goverments must work in education and environment strategies that being capable to really impact into the local population.   The  biggest threat to society and the environment is coulb be the production of garbage.

I believe that tourism makes creates more good to for society than harm because it brings local development, cultural changes, and economic growth. It opens doors for to a new way to see and connect the world.  To make a sustainable tourism sustainable, local governments must work in with educational and environmental strategies that being are capable to really of impacting into the local population.  The biggest threat to society and the environment is could be the production of garbage.

I believe that tourism creates more good for society than harm because it brings local development, cultural changes, and economic growth. It opens doors to a new way to see and connect the world. To make tourism sustainable, local governments must work with educational and environmental strategies that are capable of impacting the local population. The biggest threat to society and the environment could be the production of garbage.

1. We wouldn't use make in this context. We could use 'does' to play on the set phrase "does more harm than good" but I've chosen 'create' to add interest. This choice necessitated changing 'to' to 'for'
2. Optional: style choice could also be "creates more good than harm for society"
3. Removed comma. Please review rules on using a comma before because as it is not always necessary.
4. It is only capitalized at the beginning of a sentence.
5. Bring needs an 's' as it is conjugated in the third person singular.
6. Inserted 'and' to indicate the completion of a list.
7. Grows is a verb, growth is a noun.
8. I changed the 'for' to 'to' in order to sound more natural.
9. Removed the indefinite article 'a' as tourism is an uncountable noun.
10. Changed the position of sustainable from before the noun to after the noun to sound more natural.
11. The word governments was missing the 'n'
12. Education and environment are nouns, educational and environmental are adjectives.
13. We work with strategies, not in strategies in English.
14. Incorrect usage of the gerund form of 'to be'. 
15. Removed the word really as it weakens your argument. Consider another word such as deeply or profoundly.
16. Use the gerund form of impact here which necessitates removing to and adding of.
17. Removed into as superfluous.
18. Removed is as superfluous - you do not need two verbs here.
19. Could was mis-spelled.

Hello Joseling, 

Welcome to Lingora. Great to have you here. 

I completely agree with you - tourism is very beneficial to hosts countries and their local communities. My favourite hobby is travelling and visiting new countries. What about you? What is your favourite hobby? 

With regards to your English, I am very impressed. However, I would recommend you pay close attention to what Patricia has pointed out. Make sure you take her points into account and continue to post audios and texts here on Lingora so native English speakers like us can help you improve! 

Hi!

Thanks for this! 

Well done on your spelling and punctuation! 'Environment' can be a tricky one to get right, I've seen people who I know get it wrong a number of times!

There were just a few errors already mentioned above that caused confusion.

Thanks,

Becky :)

A very thoughtful and articulate piece of writing.  Just a few tweaks as you are using quite advanced structures!  Well done and keep posting!

I believe that tourism makes more good to society than harm, [does society more good than harm] because It  bring [stimulates] local development, cultural changes, economic grows [and economic growth]. It opens doors for a new way to see and connect the world.

To make a sustainable tourism [tourism sustainable], local goverments must work in [work on] education [educational] and environment [environnmental] strategies that being [are] capable [of] to  really impact into [impacting] the local population.

The  biggest threat to society and the environment is coulb [could] be the production of garbage.