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Sunday, November 18, 2018 - 02:51

I wonder how far the A.I. technology would go.

I wonder how far the A.I. technology would go.
I wasn't that interested in A.I. until I watched a TV show, 'Westworld'.
Westworld was about a story between humans and android robots.
After I watched Westworld, I also watched some documentaries about A.I. and then I was surprised the A.I. technology had been developed much more than I expected.
A few things I remember are that scientists treated robots like they are human babies.
They showed robots alphabets on the board and taught them how to pronounce. So robots learned English slowly.
When robots were first made, they didn't walk with their two legs in the first place.
They walked using their arms and legs and then they learned how to walk with their two legs.
One of the magazines I read, it said scientists made robots read fairy tales so that they can learn human society.
And some scientists said most of jobs would be replaced by robots in the near future.
But it can't make a world run effectively.
If no one can't buy anything because they lost jobs and don't have money then it will harm not only to people but also to companies and governments.
However we can't stop the development of A.I.
Then how we solve these problem?
From one of the documentaries I watched, they suggested a solution that the government would collect tax higher from companies using robots.
After that, the government would provide some money to people so that they can live.
No one hasn't faced in such a circumstance like this, therefore no one knows what would happen.
If jobs would be all replaced by robots and the solution would be successful, we didn't have to work.
We can enjoy our lives. How fantastic!

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I learn : English (Beginner) French (Beginner) Portuguese (Beginner) Spanish (Beginner) German (Beginner)
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Hello!

Yes again, another extremely, thought-provoking (and well written) text!

There are so many jobs which are already (currently) being replaced by robots and AI. (In my job, I am already seeing AI projects taking place which aim to replace certain employees.) Like you say, this is a real threat to ordinary people's jobs and livelihoods and the world economy in general! It will be very interesting to see how the worlds' governments react to the very fast development of AI. Like you I hope that it will mean we have to work less haha smiley.

With regards to your English, again there really are not many major corrections required. Here are just a few (relatively minor ones) though:

1. the A.I. technology As you are referring to something general here and not something specific, you don't need the article "the". Therefore you would just say AI technology. (You also don't nee the full stop after A)

2. I wonder how far the A.I. technology would go. As we know for a fact that AI technology will affect our lives in the future, it would be more suitable to use the future tense in this case. I wonder how far AI technology will go.

3. They showed robots alphabets on the board and taught them how to pronounce What exactly were the robots being taught how to pronounce? I think it would make it clearer if you said "They showed robots alphabets on the board and taught them how to pronounce the letters."

4. One of the magazines I read, it said scientists made robots read fairy tales so that they can learn human society. There is no need for the addition of the word "it" here. We already know what you are referring to. Also, as you are writing about something you did in the past, make sure that all actions are in the past. (could is the past tense of the verb can) "One of the magazines I read said scientists made robots read fairy tales so that they could learn about human society. " Remember that in English, we learn ABOUT things.

5. most of jobs No need for the preposition "of" here, as you are referencing a quantity of an unspecific group of people or things. Most jobs.

6. If no one can't buy anything because they lost jobs and don't have money If no one can buy anything because they don't have jobs or money.

7. it will harm not only to people  No need for the preposition "to" after the verb "harm". It will not only harm people...

8. Then how we solve these problem? Then how we solve these problemsS? (You're talking about more than one problem)

9. the government would collect tax higher from companies using robots. the government would collect higher taxes from companies using robots.

10. No one hasn't faced in such a circumstance like this. Note that double negatives "no one hasn't faced" are discouraged in English.  They aren’t considered acceptable in current standard English and you should avoid them in all but very informal situations. In addition, you simply "face something" and don't "face to something". No one has faced such circumstances. (In my opinion, there is no need for you to add "like these" as it is obvious what you are referring to.)

11. we didn't have to work. You are talking about something that might happen, not about something that has already happened. We wouldn't have to work.

12. We can enjoy our lives. Same here. We could enjoy our lives.

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Thank you so much, Edmund!! :D

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Hi, thanks for this, it's a really enjoyable read and your spelling is accurate :)

I've bolded some of my comments, I think most points have been made above, but below, I've made some alternative suggestions for how you could word things:

- I remember a few things about it, one of them being that scientists treat robots like they are human babies.
- Use commas where necessary: They showed robots alphabets on the board and taught them how to pronounce, so robots learned English slowly.
- You can change up the way you word sentences to make your pieces even more interesting to read: I was reading a magazine recently and it said scientists made robots read fairy tales so that they can learn about human society. Also, where you say 'made' here, this should be 'scientists make' (present tense) or 'scientists used to make'.
- Don't forget to use commas where it makes sense to: And some scientists have said that most jobs could be replaced by robots in the near future, but it wouldn't be able to make a world run effectively.
- Where you say 'no one can't', should this be 'If no one can'? or 'If people can't?' You'd need to choose one or the other.

Just be careful with your tenses; most the time, you're speculating about the future within this article, so you need to use future tense:

- After that, the government would provide some people with money so that they would be able to live.
- No one has faced a circumstance such as this, therefore no one knows what would happen. Keep your use of 'would' here consistent throughout the piece as you're talking about the future most of the time.
- If all jobs were to be replaced by robots and the solution was to be successful, we wouldn't have to work.
- We would be able to enjoy our lives; how fantastic!

Thanks, 

Becky :)

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I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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Very well written and interesting post once again!  I have made a few changes due to the advanced level of English in some of the phrases:

I wonder how far the A.I. technology would   will go. 

I wasn't that interested in A.I. until I watched a TV show, 'Westworld'.

Westworld was about a story between humans and android robots.

After I watched Westworld, I also watched some documentaries about A.I. and then I was surprised the that A.I. technology had been developed much more than I expected.

A few things I remember are that scientists treated robots like they are were human babies. [It's important to keep the tense the same - so if you use "treated" you need to follow with "were" rather than "are"]

They showed robots alphabets on the board and taught them how to pronounce words. So robots learned English slowly. [or you could say "and taught them the correct pronunciation of English]

When robots were first made, they didn't walk with their two legs in the first place. [I know what you mean here but it would be better to say "they didn't walk upright"

They walked using their arms and legs and then they learned how to walk with their two legs. [We say "they walked on all fours"]

In one of the magazines I read, it said scientists made robots read fairy tales so that they can  could learn human society. [Again - keep the past tense throughout the sentence; try not to switch to the present tense].

And some scientists said most of jobs would be replaced by robots in the near future.

But it this can't make a world run effectively. ["this" is better here as it's more specific]

If no one can't buy anything because they lost jobs and don't have money If noone is able to buy anything because they have lost their job and have no money then it will not only cause harm not only to people but also to companies and governments.

However we can't stop the development of A.I.

Then how do we solve these problem?

From In one of the documentaries I watched, they suggested a solution that the government would could collect higher tax higher from companies using robots.

After that, the government would provide some money to people so that they can could live.

No one hasn't faced in such a circumstance has faced a situation like this, therefore no one knows what would happen. [Interestingly, you used "no one" correctly in the second half of this sentence but not in the first half! - "No one" does the work of making the phrase negative so you follow it with "has" rather than "hasn't"]

If jobs would could all be all replaced by robots and the solution would be was successful, we didn't wouldn't have to work.

We can would be able to enjoy our lives. How fantastic!

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