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Friday, March 22, 2019 - 23:59

Subject: JOBS

Subject: JOBS

Aristotle, one of the greatest philosophers in history said, “A pleasure in the job puts perfection in the work”. A lot of us work in the career they had always dreamed of it, while others didn’t have the chance to be in the job they’ve wanted. But if we don’t love what we do, there won’t be any pleasure in our life.

When I was at Secondary school, I used to think a lot about the day I will be a pharmacist, my dream job, I love to deal with things related to medicines, injections, etc. Fortunately, I have achieved part of this dream. I am working now as a pharmacist for my parents. I still remember when I was helping my Math teacher to explain lesson for students, I was among the first in Math Subject and I was intending to be a Math teacher. Besides that, I hope to have this job that won’t make me sleep at night, and have always a headache, but at the same time will give me the most wonderful feeling in life which is mother job. On other hand, I can’t imagine myself working as waitress due to my friend advices, who always complains about bad customers and how the manager obliged her to not make the client feel angry. The Second job that I’m not planning to make it part of my life is the journalist job because it needs a person who talks a lot which is not compatible with my personality. Also, I would hate any job consist of duties like informing someone that he will be fired from work, like Human Resources job. Moreover, I wouldn’t mind working as a baby sitter, I turn into a child when I sit with group of babies. I love cooking and good at it, so I would love to be a cooker if there someone will clean after me. However, my brother’s manager offered me to be a tour guide for his company. I didn’t accept because I don’t know a lot of places and I wasn’t good at English, while now I wouldn’t mind thinking for applying for it.

Eventually, many o f us have struggled with their jobs and duties which make them sometimes procrastinate to finish these duties. It may be hard to find the job you love or you have dreamed about it. But I believe that, once we have the chance to do what we are passionate about, we shouldn’t think twice to accept it.

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Karin Brauner's picture
I learn : French (Beginner)
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Hi Iman,

I got the message you were trying to convey, but I think it needs some changes, which I will leave in a different colour.

 

Aristotle, one of the greatest philosophers in history said, “A pleasure in the job puts perfection in the work”. A lot of us work in the career we had always dreamed of it, while others didn’t have the chance to be in the job they’ve wanted. But if we don’t love what we do, there won’t be any pleasure in our life.

When I was at Secondary school, I used to think a lot about the day I would become a pharmacist, my dream job! I love to deal with things related to medicines, injections, etc. Fortunately, I have achieved part of this dream. I am now working as a pharmacist for my parents. I still remember when I was helping my Maths teacher to explain a lesson to students; I was among the best Maths student Subject and I was intending to be a Maths teacher. Besides that, I hope to become a mother, which is a job that won’t let me sleep at night, and  always have a headache, but at the same time which will give me the most wonderful feeling in life. On the other hand, I can’t imagine myself working as waitress due to my friend's comments, who always complains about bad customers and how the manager tells her to not make the client feel angry. The Second job that I wouldn't like to do is journalism because it needs a person who talks a lot, and this is not compatible with my personality. Also, I would hate any job that consists of duties like informing someone that they will be fired from work, like Human Resources. Moreover, I wouldn’t mind working as a baby sitter, I turn into a child when I sit with group of babies! I love cooking and good at it, so I would love to be a chef if someone will clean after me. However, my brother’s manager offered me to be a tour guide for his company. I didn’t accept because I didn't know a lot of places and I wasn’t good at English, while now I wouldn’t mind thinking of applying for it.

Eventually,   Many o f us have struggled with our jobs and duties which has led us to sometimes procrastinate to finish these duties. It may be hard to find the job you love or you have dreamed about it. But I believe that, once we have the chance to do what we are passionate about, we shouldn’t think twice to accept it.

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iman mohammed's picture
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Hi Karin,

Many thanks for your help.

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