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Hi again, Aitor. Great job! As Ed and Ros have mentioned...

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i created a small conversation. its consisted of two part. part one: a girl is going with boy in a blind date. part two: suddenly she will meet her friend that she will ask her awkward question without knowing that the person is behind her.

PART ONE1:

BOY: Hello

GIRL: Hi

BOY: Have I been late?

GIRL: No, I have just arrived.

BOY: So I won’t ask you to tell me about yourself. Because we were talking a lot on FB and we knew everything about each other. But may I tell you that you are prettier in reality.

GIRL: thanks a lot and you look handsome too. May I excuse for 2  min. I have to go to the ladies room.

BOY: yes, of course, I will be waiting for you.

GIRL: ok

PART 2

friend: Imanoooooooo, it’s nice to meet you here. How are you darling?

GIRL: I am pretty good. What about you?

friend:  I am good. So tell how me how did you find the strawberry. (she meant the boy)

GIRL: (shocked) Strawberries…. you mean. mmm so delicious. (i am pretending that she talked about the fruits)

friend: what strawberries?  No, I mean the guy that you’ll go with him.

Did you like him? How does he look in reality? Did he take you to that restaurant that you had been dreaming to enter but you didn’t because you had been completely broke?

GIRL: no we came here, and this reminds me I am gonna block you when I go home. But before, I want you to meet the strawberry.

 

 

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Aliakbar Majidi's picture
I learn : French (Beginner) Persian (Expert) Spanish (Beginner)
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Hi Iman. Good job! The conversation you created is interesting. Is it real or did you make it up? By the way, here are some corrections to your conversation, please take a look. 

I have created a small conversation. It consists of two parts. Part one: a girl is going on a blind date with a boy. Part two: she suddenly meets her friend and she will ask her awkward questions without knowing that the person is behind her.


PART ONE1:

 

BOY: Hello

GIRL: Hi

BOY: Am I late?

GIRL: No, I have just arrived.

BOY: So, I won’t ask you to tell me about yourself. Because we have been talking a lot on FB and we knew everything about each other. But may I tell you that you are prettier in real life.

GIRL: Thanks a lot and you look handsome, too. Would you excuse me for 2 minutes? I have to go to the ladies’ room.

BOY: Yes, of course, I will be waiting for you.

GIRL: OK.

PART 2

Friend: Imanoooooooo (Do you mean Imaaaaaan?), it’s nice meeting you here. How are you, darling?

GIRL: I am pretty good. What about you?

Friend:  I am good. So, tell how me how did you find the strawberry. (She meant the boy.)

GIRL: (Shocked) Strawberries…. you mean. Mm … so delicious. (I was pretending that she talked about the fruit.)

Friend: What strawberries?  No, I mean the guy that you go out with.

Did you like him? How does he look in real life? Did he take you to that restaurant that you had been dreaming to go to but you didn’t because you had been completely broke?

GIRL: No, we came here, and I should remember to block you when I go home. But before that, I want you to meet the strawberry.

 

Keep it up!


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iman mohammed's picture
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haahaha thanks.

no i created it , it's not real

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PART ONE1:

BOY: Hello

GIRL: Hi

BOY: Have I been late? Am I late?

GIRL: No, I have just arrived.

BOY: So I won’t ask you to tell me about yourself. Because because we were talking a lot on FB and we knew know everything about each other. But may I tell you that you are prettier in reality.

GIRL: thanks a lot and you look handsome too. May I be excuse excused for 2 min? I have to go to the ladies room.

BOY: yes, of course, I will be waiting for you.

GIRL: ok

PART 2

friend: Imanoooooooo, it’s nice to meet you here! How are you darling doing?

GIRL: I am pretty good. What about you?

friend:  I am good. So tell how me  how me how did you find the strawberry? (she meant means the boy)

GIRL: (shocked) Strawberries…. you mean. mmm so delicious. (I am pretending that she talked about the fruits)

friend: what strawberries?  No, I mean the guy that you’ll go with him you are with.

Did Do you like him? How does he look in reality? (it is better to say "How does he look in person" Did he take you to that restaurant that you had been dreaming to enter visit but you didn’t because you had been completely broke?

GIRL: no we came here, and this reminds me I am gonna block you when I go home. But before, I want you to meet the strawberry.

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thanks a lot

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Karin Brauner's picture
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Aliakbar gave some good feedback.

Your text made me giggle. Strawberry! This is great! Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work!

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hahaha thanks a lot.

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Ros Watson's picture
I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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Hi Iman. This is fun!  Just a few tweaks in an otherwise good conversation:

It consists of two parts.  A girl is going out with a boy on a blind date.  Suddenly she meets her friend.  She asks an awkward question....

Am I late?  No, I've just arrived.    May I be excused for 2 minutes?  So tell me.  How did you find the strawberry?  (I am pretending she's talking about the fruits).  No, I mean the guy you're going on a date with.  What does he look like in real life?  Did he take you to the restaurant you had been dreaming of going to but you didn't because you were completely broke?  No, we came here, and that reminds me.....  But before that, I want you to meet the strawberry.

Your conversation style is very natural.  The only thing is that we don't use the word "strawberry" in the UK.  However, you could substitute "peach"!!

Well done and keep writing!

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