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I going to talk about holidays :)

Hello. Today I talk about my holidays. If you have any advice for me, please tell me

I love going to holidays! 

In the  months of summer I always like go to the beach with my best friends. We spend all the day in the beach and our objectif is to achieve the best sun tan! We go to places in the Mediterranean countries like the Spain and Italie. We always have a very nice time. In the evenings we go out together to eat in the restaurants and sometimes we go to the discos after that. But often we are too tired so we go back home to rest.

I don't go to the holidays with my family now. I prefer the holidays with my friends because it is more fun. My family don not like do the same things as me when they go to holidays.

 

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I learn : Arabic (Beginner) Dutch (Beginner) French (Beginner) Russian (Beginner) Spanish (Beginner)
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Quite easy to understand! As an American English speaker, I would say going on vacation, but I believe even those who say holiday say "on holiday" and not "to holiday." Instead of "I always like go to the beach" you could either say "I always like to go to the beach" or "I always like going to the beach." 

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When doesn't is not contracted, it is does not.  

Italie -> Italy

objectif -> objective

Sounds like you have a lot of fun on your holidays!

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I learn : French (Beginner)
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Hi Adeline!

Great effor in this text! I can understand it well even with some grammar errors, which I will help you with below:

In your title, you write "I going to talk about holidays" --> just one correction here: I'm instead of I. "I am going" is the whole phrase. 

I - person doing the action

Am - auxiliary verb (and necessary for correct grammar)

Going to - verb phrase

The next sentence: Today I talk about my holidays.

This sentence is OK, but you could use a helping verb there too, or add a couple more words, for example:

--> Today I will talk about my holidays.

--> Today I want to talk about my holidays.



 

In the months of summer -- it's fine, but usually we would say "in the Summer months"

 

We spend all the day in the beach and our objectif is to achieve the best sun tan!

like the use of the exclamation mark to express your excitement and tone in the text. well done!

all the day  - in languages such as Spanish you say "todo el dia", so I see what you were doing here. In English it's best to just say --> All day

in the beach practice your prepositions! At the beach would be a better preposition to use. you are not inside the beach, after all! ;)

objectif - correct spelling is --> objective

to achieve --> this is fine to say, but as you are using informal language in the rest of your text, then I would say it might sound best like this --> our objective is to get the best sun tan!

 

We go to places in the Mediterranean countries like the Spain and Italie.

- this is absolutely fine! just a few suggestions to expand your English a bit:

--> We like to go to places...

--> we visit places in...

in the mediterranean countries like the Spain --> same as above - remove "the" --> In mediterranean countries like Spain....

countries like the Spain and Italie --> could also use "such as" instead of "like", but like is fine.

Italie - correct spelling --> Italy

 

In the evenings we go out together to eat in the restaurants and sometimes we go to the discos after that.

maybe change in the restaurants for --> at restaurants OR 

we go out together --> as mentioned above, maybe add we LIKE to go out together.

we go to the discos --> In English discos might be called NightClubs or just Clubs instead. (I understood, we say disco in Guatemala! and others would know what you meant too)

 

But often we are too tired so we go back home to rest.--> no corrections on this one. Great!

 

I don't go to the holidays with my family now.

go to the holidays --> I don't go on holidays with... "to the" doesn't work well there. " on" is better", and the "the" needed to go anyway :) (as above)

 

I prefer the holidays with my friends because it is more fun.  --> just remove "the" and all else is fine.

 

My family don not like do the same things as me when they go to holidays.


. If you have any advice for me, please tell me

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Hope this was helpful! Keep going, you are doing great!

Karin



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I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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Hi Adeline

This is good and you really communicated your love of going on holiday!  I have pasted the whole text below and will explain my changes.  

I’m going to talk about holidays :)

Hello. Today I am going to talk about my holidays. If you have any advice for me, please tell me

I love going on holiday! 

In summer I always like go to the beach with my best friends. We spend all day on the beach and our objective is to get the best sun tan! We go to places in the Mediterranean like Spain and Italy. We always have a very nice [brilliant] time. In the evenings we go out together to restaurants and sometimes we go to discos afterwards.  But often we are too tired so we go back home to rest.

I don't go on holiday with my family now. I prefer holidays with my friends – it’s more fun. My family don’t like to do the same things as me when they go on holiday.

 

First - I love going on holiday - to "go on holiday" is an idiomatic phrase and uses "holiday" in the singular.  Again - I've used "In summer" is more natural than "In the months of summer".  If you are describing countries which are mediterranean, you can say "in the Mediterranean".  It sounds more natural.  Try using "brilliant" or "great" instead of "nice" (though "nice" is still ok!). 

When you talk about going to restaurants and discos generally rather than specific ones, use "a" rather than "the" in the singular or when more than one don't use the article at all - for example.  "I like to go to a disco in the evening" - singular OR "I like to go to discos" - plural.  It's the same rule when you say "I prefer holidays with my friends".

Your writing is interesting and fun to read.  Keep them coming!!

 

Ros

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I learn : French (Beginner) Persian (Expert) Spanish (Beginner)
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Hi Adeline. Fabulous work! It seems you really have fun when you are on holidays! I am really glad for you. Regarding your text, Rebecca, Karin, and Ros have pointed out several useful tips for you to keep in mind. Here, I have rewritten the text for you so that you can compare it to the original one.

I’m Going to Talk About Holidays :)


Hello. Today I will talk about my holidays. If you have any advice for me, please tell me

I love going on holidays! 

In the summertime, I like to go to the beach with my best friends all the time. We spend all day at the beach and our goal is to get the best suntan! We like to visit places in Mediterranean countries like Spain and Italy. We always have a very nice time. In the evenings, we like to go out together to eat at a restaurant and sometimes we like to go to some nightclubs after that. But often, we are too tired so we will go back home to rest.

I don't go on holidays with my family now. I prefer to spend the holidays with my friends because it is more fun. My family does not like to do the same things as me when they go on holidays.


Keep up the good work! Keep on posting and improving. Good luck!

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