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Reason to study English

I have 2 reasons to study English.
The 1st one is that I will widen my career options. My company is an outsourcing company and we work as an IT support staff at the client's office.  I have been working with a client for 3 and a half years, but I will have a chance to transfer to another client if I am qualified. My company has many clients and some of them are international companies which English skills are required. If my English skills are enough to work at those clients, I will get many choices and be able to work at a new client that is best for me.
 
The 2nd reason is that speaking English has been my dream since I was a child. I started to learn English at school when I was a junior high school student like other Japanese. I liked the subject of English the best. I saw people speaking English on TV and they looked so cool. So I started to think about becoming fluent in English and haven't changed my mind about it until now.
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The learners ability to use nouns, verbs, adjectives, etc. correctly in sentences, using verb tenses accurately, and having the correct agreement between subjects and predicates. For instance, one would say "they were" instead of "they was."

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Aliakbar Majidi's picture
I learn : French (Beginner) Persian (Expert) Spanish (Beginner)
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Fabulous work, Suzu. You have improved a lot since last you posted. Keep it up and you will be proficient in English in no time. 

One can have several reasons for learning English, however, the ones that you can feel will be the ones motivating you to continue studying. In your case, your career is your motivation for learning English, which is an extremely strong one. Good luck!

Regarding your text, I have made some modifications to it. Please take a look at it and do not hesitate to ask me any questions that might pop in your mind.

 

Reason to Study English


I have 2 reasons to study (Also, for studying) English.

The 1st (first) one is that I will widen my career options. My company is an outsourcing company and we I work as an IT support staff at the a client's office.  I have been working with a the client for 3 and a half years, but I will have a chance to be transferred to another client’s company if I am qualified. My company has many clients and some of them are international companies at which English skills are required. If my English skills are good enough to work at with those clients, I will get many choices and be able to work at a new client’s company that is best for me (Also, suits me best(.

The 2nd (second) reason is that speaking English has been my dream since I was a child. I started to learn English at school when I was a junior high school student like other Japanese students do. I liked the subject of English the best. I saw people speaking English on TV and they looked (Also, sounded) so cool. So, I started to think about becoming fluent in English and haven't (Contractions should be avoided in writing.) changed my mind about it until now (Also, since then).

 


Best of luck to you!

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I learn : English (Intermediate)
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Thank you for your advice as always.
It is always difficult for me to use prepositions and articles correctly, so I will continue to practice it by writing many texts!

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I learn : French (Beginner) Persian (Expert) Spanish (Beginner)
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You are quite welcome, Suzu. You can find a guide on how to use prepositions and articles in English at this link: https://www.uts.edu.au/sites/default/files/Grammar%203%20Articles%2C%20Prepositions%20%26%20Punctuation.pdf

Please take a look at it and if you have any questions, I will be here to help you.

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I learn : English (Intermediate)
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Apart from prepositions and articles, it is also hard for me to use punctuations correctly, so this guide is very helpful!

I will learn from this and try to make more natural sentences. Thank you for giving me the useful information.

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I learn : Chinese (Beginner) French (Beginner) German (Beginner) Portuguese (Beginner) Spanish (Beginner) Arabic (Beginner)
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Hi Suzu,

The good news is that you already write English very well. In fact you write better than many native English speakers I know! Congratulations smiley.

Just make sure you keep practicing.

The company you work for sounds amazing - it is fantastic that they are able to offer you so many opportunities. Are all of your companies' clients based in Japan or are some based abroad? Hopefully you will have the chance to work abroad in an English speaking country.

With regards to your text, Aliakbar has already done a good job of evaluating it. I would add the following

1. "as an IT support staff " -> (In English, we tend to refer to the "teams" we work in when we talk about our professional lives) "I work in the IT support team."

2. " I liked the subject of English the best" (This sounds a bit strange.) I would instead say "English was my favourite subject."

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I learn : English (Intermediate)
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I am very glad to hear that. I do not have the chance to work abroad at the moment, but I will keep practicing so that I can communicate with my users and colleagues who speak English!

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I have 2 reasons to study English.
The 1st one is that I will widen my career options. My company is an outsourcing company and we work as an IT support staff at the client's office.  I have been working with a client for 3 and a half years, but I will have a chance to transfer to another client if I am qualified. My company has many clients and some of them are international companies which English skills are required. If my English skills are enough to work at with those clients, I will get have many choices and be able to work at with a new client that is best for me.
 
The 2nd reason is that speaking English has been my dream since I was a child. I started to learn English at school when I was a junior high school student like other Japanese children. I liked the subject of English the best. I saw people speaking English on TV and they looked so cool, (a comma would be best right here to form a compound sentence) so I started to think about becoming fluent in English and haven't changed my mind about it until now.
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I learn : English (Intermediate)
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Thank you for your advice. I will try to write my texts with correct punctuations.

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I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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Your English is excellent Suzu.  Here are my (very small) "tweaks"

I have 2 [I would write the word "two" rather than use the number here] reasons to study English.
The 1st [first] one is that I will widen my career options. My company is an outsourcing company and we work as an IT support staff at the client's office.  I have been working with a client for 3 [three] and a half years, but I will have a chance to transfer to another client if I am qualified. My company has many clients and some of them are international companies which English skills are required. [which require English skills/for which English skills are required]. If my English skills are [good] enough to work at [for] those clients, I will get many choices and be able to work at a new client that is best for me.
 
The 2nd [second] reason is that speaking English has been my dream since I was a child. I started to learn English at school when I was a junior high school student like other Japanese [children]. I liked the subject of English the best. I saw people speaking English on TV and they looked so cool. So I started to think about becoming fluent in English and haven't changed my mind about it until now. ["until now" means that now you have changed your mind.  You could say "to this day" or "and I still feel the same"].
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I learn : English (Intermediate)
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Thank you for your comment as always. I did not know the word "tweaks", so I will also remember it.

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