I looked back and saw that Ilak was alive and even conscious. While we were fighting, he tried to lie comfortably, and was pale and covered in blood, pressing a bloodied rag to his shoulder. Our examination showed that his vital organs and bones were apparently not affected. Javelin got under the collarbone and stuck in the muscles just above the lung. Ligaments, too, fortunately, turned out to be intact.
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| Pronunciation The learners' ability to enunciate the various consonants, consonant blends, vowels, and vowel blends in words, words linked together, and words in sentences. | The pronunciation contained some individual word pronunciation errors. Around 3-4 errors People thought this 0 | The pronunciation is exceptional and mirrors a native speaker. Shows a clear understanding of word stress and intonation. Only 0-2 errors People thought this 3 | The pronunciation is inconsistent and made it difficult to understand. 5 or more errors People thought this 0 |
Good job, Oleks! Your story is getting pretty bloody!
I looked back and saw that Ilak was alive and even conscious. While we were fighting, he tried to lie comfortably
, and. He was pale and covered in blood, pressing a bloodied ragtoagainst his shoulder. Our examination showed that his vital organs and bones were apparently not affected. The javelin had got under the collarbone and stuck in the muscles just above the lung. Ligaments, too, fortunately, turned out to be intact. (Also, ‘Fortunately, his ligaments turned out to be intact, too.’)Also:
Muscle -> /ˈmʌsəl/ | https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/muscle
Hi Ali! Thank you for your comment and link! I am glad that I am improving.
This is how to pronounce muscle.
Thank you for your audio!
I looked back and saw that Ilak was alive and even conscious. While we were fighting, he tried to lie comfortably
, and waswhile pale and covered in blood and pressing a bloodied rag to his shoulder. Our examination showed that his vital organs and bones were apparently not affected. Javelin got under the collarbone and stuck in the muscles just above the lung.Ligaments, too, fortunately, turned out to be intact.Fortunately, his ligaments turned out to be intact too.Nice job. Minor tweaks that can improve the style of your writing, but overall good job
Hi Kealin!n Thank you! I am very grateful to you and your friends for improving my style.
Hi Oleks
Ilak was incredibly lucky then!!!
Out of curiosity what kind of painkillers did you give him? He must have been in agony
Another brilliant extract which I thoroughly enjoyed!
Here are a couple of my observations