He had few chances against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill his assailant personally, so I did not make fatal strikes, but only distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.
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Hi Oleks, well done!
He had few chances of winning, fighting against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill his assailant personally, so I did not make fatal
strikesstrokes,butonly distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.Hi Ali! Thank you!
Your text had no mistakes. I just made a couple of 'tweaks' to make it sound more natural! Well done and good audio too!
He had
few chanceslittle chance against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill [or you could say 'would take pleasure in killing'] his assailant personally, so I did not make any fatal strikes, butonlyjust distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.Hi Ros! Thank you for your improvements to this text!
He had few chances against two opponents at the same time. I decided that Ghom would be pleased to kill his assailant personally, so I did not make fatal strikes and only distracted him with fake lunges. In the end, Ghom directed the final blow with a crowbar in the enemy’s chest and looked at me indignantly.
nice job
Hi Kealin! Thank you!
Hi Oleks,
Another brutal, gory extract which I loved reading!
I can't really think of anything that needs to be corrected here! Well done!
Perhaps you could instead (instead of saying "directed the final blow with a crowbar ") say dealt the final blow with a crossbar.
In my opinion it sounds slightly more "natural".
Hi Ed! Thank you! I am glad that you like my story. I think you are right: "dealt the final blow" sounds more natural.