Hello again, I am training myself for the TOEFL Writing Section and I want you to help me by reviewing this short essay. For me, speaking and writing are the two most hardest abilities in English and I need to improve them. I would very grateful to get feedback on this. Here is my text (suggested number of words for this part is 150-225):
Nowadays, a group of people in the United States are suggesting to implement a new working schedule. By choosing this schedule, employees will have the option to work four days a week instead of five giving the chance to rest one more day per week. However, a businessman argues that even when this new modality seems to be beneficial for employees, it is not worthy due to several financial and psychological factors.
First, new employees must be hired in order to cover remaining working hours, requiring to invest more money in training for them. At the same time, stuffs like computers, working tools or personal protection equipment, should be acquired for the incoming company members.
On the other hand, if employees work less time per week this could make employeers to have more expectations on them demanding the same amount of work in a shortest period. Definitely, this would increase the pressure on the worker and will not create a good work environment.
Finally, the man says that working less reduces experience gathered by the employee and his abilities could not be increased in the same way as before.
Total number of words: 189
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The learners ability to use nouns, verbs, adjectives, etc. correctly in sentences, using verb tenses accurately, and having the correct agreement between subjects and predicates. For instance, one would say "they were" instead of "they was."
There are 3-4 grammatical errors
There are 0-2 grammatical errors
There are 5 or more grammatical errors
The learner's ability to use certain marks to clarify meaning of their writing by grouping words grammatically into sentences and clauses and phrases.
There are 3-4 errors in capitalization and punctuation.
There are 0-2 errors in capitalization and punctuation.
There are 5 or more errors in capitalization and punctuation.
The learners' ability to form words with the correct letters in the correct order
There are 3-4 spelling errors
There are 0-2 spelling errors
There are 5 or more spelling errors
The learner's ability to tailor the written work to fit the specific context, purpose, or audience
Mostly understandable. However, there are a few errors which cause confusion.
Easy to understand. Writing flows and keeps reader engaged.
Quite hard to understand.