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Bad songs

When I listen the radio I hear many times songs with explicit lyrics. The lyrics are often very offensive and degrading at women and also glorify the violence. The other day I listened a song on the radio which was made by a celebrated French rapper and he was boasting of killing many peoples in the past in the song. It was so shocking and horrible so I closed immediately the radio.

For me I think it is worrying is that many young people in France and many other countries are inspired of this kind of music and really like it. The gouvernment must to do something to stop it, for example; making laws to stop rappers to write these types of lyrics or censor them.

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Karin Brauner's picture
I learn : French (Beginner)
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Hi Adeline,

Nice attempt. There are some connecting words and articles missing. Let me rewrite the text with corrections (find the corrections in a different colour).

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When I listen to the radio I often hear songs with explicit lyrics. The lyrics are often very offensive and degrading to women and also glorify the violence. The other day I heard a song on the radio sung by a celebrated French rapper where was boasting about  killing many people in the past. It was so shocking and horrible so I immediately turned the radio off.

For me, I think it is worrying that many young people in France and many other countries are inspired by this kind of music and really like it. The government must to do something to stop it, for example, by making laws to stop rappers from writing these types of lyrics or censor them.

 

I hope this helps!

 

Karin

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I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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I loved this!

When I listen the radio I hear many times songs with explicit lyrics. [Consider saying “frequently” instead of “many times” and putting it before the verb] – “I frequently hear songs with explicit lyrics”. The lyrics are often very offensive and degrading at women [Instead of “at” you need to use “to” here] and also glorify the violence. [You don’t need the definite article here].  The other day I listened to a song on the radio which was made by a celebrated French rapper and he was boasting in the song of about killing many peoples [people is a collective noun and doesn’t take an “s”]in the past.  It was so shocking and horrible so that I closed immediately the radio.  [Try saying “I immediately turned off the radio”]

For me Personally, I think it is worrying is that many young people in France and many other countries are inspired of by this kind of music and really like it. The gouvernment must to do something to stop it by, for example; , making laws to stop rappers writing  to write [Use the gerund form of the verb here rather than the infinitive]these types of lyrics or censor them.

 

These are just a few “tweaks” but your content is generally very good.  I really enjoyed reading it!

 

Ros

When I listen the radio I hear many times songs with explicit lyrics. [Consider saying “frequently” instead of “many times” and putting it before the verb] – “I frequently hear songs with explicit lyrics”. The lyrics are often very offensive and degrading at women [Instead of “at” you need to use “to” here] and also glorify the violence. [You don’t need the definite article here].  The other day I listened to a song on the radio which was made by a celebrated French rapper and he was boasting in the song of about killing many peoples [people is a collective noun and doesn’t take an “s”]in the past.  It was so shocking and horrible so that I closed immediately the radio.  [Try saying “I immediately turned off the radio”]

For me Personally, I think it is worrying is that many young people in France and many other countries are inspired of by this kind of music and really like it. The gouvernment must to do something to stop it by, for example; , making laws to stop rappers writing  to write [Use the gerund form of the verb here rather than the infinitive]these types of lyrics or censor them.

 

These are just a few “tweaks” but your content is generally very good.  I really enjoyed reading it!

 

Ros

When I listen the radio I hear many times songs with explicit lyrics. [Consider saying “frequently” instead of “many times” and putting it before the verb] – “I frequently hear songs with explicit lyrics”. The lyrics are often very offensive and degrading at women [Instead of “at” you need to use “to” here] and also glorify the violence. [You don’t need the definite article here].  The other day I listened to a song on the radio which was made by a celebrated French rapper and he was boasting in the song of about killing many peoples [people is a collective noun and doesn’t take an “s”]in the past.  It was so shocking and horrible so that I closed immediately the radio.  [Try saying “I immediately turned off the radio”]

For me Personally, I think it is worrying is that many young people in France and many other countries are inspired of by this kind of music and really like it. The gouvernment must to do something to stop it by, for example; , making laws to stop rappers writing  to write [Use the gerund form of the verb here rather than the infinitive]these types of lyrics or censor them.

 

These are just a few “tweaks” but your content is generally very good.  I really enjoyed reading it!

 

Ros

 

 

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