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I finished watching American Crime Story season one.

The season one is about O.J. Simpson's trial. I knew about the case a little bit but not that specifically.

It was interesting to watch how the whole trial had passed, people who involved in the case and the circumstances when the trial had happened.

It would be a spoiler if I write down how the trial ended. I'm sure many of you who are reading this already know anyway.

One thing is sure that I wouldn't be a lawyer even if I have an ability to do it. It would be very stressful. 

I watched it in English subtitles so I didn't fully understand the whole episodes but it was worth it.

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Ros Watson's picture
I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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Really good!  A few little tweaks which I hope will help.  I enjoyed reading it.  Post some more!!

 

The s  Season one is about O.J. Simpson's trial. I knew a little about the case a little bit but not that specifically.

It was interesting to watch how the whole trial had passed [Try using played out here], the people who had been involved in the case and the circumstances when in which the trial had happened. [It might sound smoother if you just used the past simple here:  It was interesting to watch how the whole trial played out, the people where were involved in the case and the circumstances in which the trial happened].

It would be a spoiler if I write down how the trial ended. I'm sure many of you who are reading this already know anyway.

One thing is sure. that I wouldn't be a lawyer even if I have an had the ability to do it. It would be very stressful. [You are using the conditional here so we say "I would (or wouldn't) if I had.  The first clause contains the word "would" and the second (if clause) contains the past simple].  We can also turn the sentence round and say "Even if I had the ability I wouldn't be a lawyer].

I watched it the series [Because you have started a new paragraph it would be a good idea to state what you watched] in English subtitles so I didn't fully understand the whole all the episodes but it was worth it. ["the whole" would have to refer to one thing - so unless you just mean one episode, it's better to use "all the"]

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Thanks you for your kindness correction, Ros. I'll post some more.

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Karin Brauner's picture
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Hi, here are some corrections, highlighted within your text:

 

The s Season one is about O.J. Simpson's trial. I knew a little bit about the case but not in too much detail specifically.

It was interesting to watch how the whole trial played out, the people who involved in the case and the circumstances at the time of the trial.

It would be a spoiler if I wrote down how the trial ended. I'm sure many of you who are reading this already know anyway.

One thing is for sure, I wouldn't be a lawyer even if I had the ability to do it. It would be very stressful. 

I watched it with English subtitles so I didn't fully understand everything in the episodes but it was worth it.

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Thank you very much, Karin.

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Thank you very much, Karin.

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Hi! This is good, thanks. 

Here's how you could have improved it:

- 'I knew little about the case and I wasn't aware of specific details of it.'

- 'I didn't fully understand the episodes all the way through as I watched them in English subtitles, but they were worth watching.'

Thanks, Becky :) 

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Thank you SO MUCH!!!! have a great day.

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Aliakbar Majidi's picture
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Hi OnTheEarth. Well done! It seems you are interested in TV shows. Why do you think you like “American Crime Story”? What other TV series have you watched?

Watching movies and TV series are great ways to improve your English skills. With them, you experience real English as it is spoken without any modification or simplification. That way, you will know about real idioms and vocabulary that are used on a daily basis in English speaking countries.

Regarding your text, you have done a good job. Here are some tweaks to improve it a bit.

  • I Finished Watching … -> I have finished watching … (You are talking about an action performed in the past mentioning no specific time.)
  • The season one is about …. -> Season one is about …
  • I knew about the case a little … -> I knew a little about the case
  • … the trial had passed -> … the trial had worked out
  • … even if I have an ability to do it -> … even I had the possibility
  • … the whole episodes -> … all the episodes completely

Best of luck to you! Keep up the good work!

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