I finished watching American Crime Story season 2.
Season 1 took place mostly in the trial. So I thought season 2 would do the same but it didn't.
It was about a murderer who killed several people including Gianni Versace who was a famous fashion designer.
That was why its co-title was 'The Assassination of Gianni Versace'.
I knew Versace is a clothes brand. But I didn't know the creator was murdered.
It is such a shame that we lost this talented person and other victims too.
The story began like from the end of the story. It reminded me of one of Nolan's movies.
But I was more impressed by their acting than the story itself, especially the murderer.
Later I found out the actor who played as the murderer is actually working as a singer more than as an actor.
From I remember, his previous acting career was only one, the TV show 'Glee'.
I hope to see him more from other movies and TV shows.
Also I was glad that I could see other familiar faces in the show.
They played so well that all of them were like they were real.
I heard that other series of American Crime Story will be made. I hope to see them soon.
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Hello - again great effort. I'm tempted to watch American Crime Story now after reading your summary of it. I love these kinds of shows.
With regards to your English, only a few minor corrections are necessary:
1.
Season 1 took place mostly in the trialSeason 1 took place mostly during the trial. [As a trial is an ongoing process, it is best to use a word like "during". ]2.
The story began like from the end of the story.This sentence does not make sense. Could you tell me what you are trying to explain here?3. t
he actor who played as the murdererthe actor who played the murderer. [You do not need the word "as" when you refer to actors who play certain characters]4.
From I rememberFrom what I remember5.
his previous acting career was only one, the TV show 'Glee'. He only ever starred in the TV show 'Glee'. [Starring means being the main character in a movie or play.]6.
I hope to see him more from other movies and TV shows.I hope to see him more / I hope to see more of him in other movies and TV shows7.
They played so wellthey acted so well / the actors were so good thatThank you again, Edmund. And for the second sentence, I was trying to say It took place 'End' -> 'Middle -> 'Start'. When we see a movie we see 'start' -> 'middle' -> 'end'. It wasn't in chronological order. I hope this makes sense.
Hi! Fantastic work! Spelling and punctuation is great! I think that if you work on your understanding of prepositions within sentences, your English skills will improve even more.
In addition to the changes outlined above, here are some of mine:
Thanks, Becky :)
Prepositions are always difficult for me. I'll study English harder. Thank you, Becky.
Well done! This was really excellent. You got across what you meant really well! Just a few little tweaks which I hope will help. Keep writing. I really enjoy your posts. Ros
I have finished watching American Crime Story season 2. [Use the present perfect here - to show an action which happened in the past but is relevant now]
Season 1 took place mostly in the trial. So I thought season 2 would do the same but it didn't.
It was about a murderer who killed several people, including Gianni Versace, who was a famous fashion designer. [Use commas to break up this rather long sentence]
That was why its co-title was 'The Assassination of Gianni Versace'.
I knew Versace
iswas a clothes brand. But I didn't know the creator was murdered.It is such a shame that we lost this talented person and other victims too.
The
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Later I found out the actor who played
asthe murderer is actually currently working as a singer more than as an actor. [If you put in the word "currently" it's clear that you are talking about what the actor is doing now or when he's not in this particular drama]From what I remember, his previous acting career
wasconsisted of only one role - in the TV show 'Glee'.I hope to see him more
fromin other movies and TV shows.Also I was glad
that I couldto see other familiar faces in the show. [Saying "I was glad to see" is more natural than "glad that I could see"]They all played so well [or convincingly] that
all of them were like theythey seemed as if they were real.I heard that other series of American Crime Story will be made. I hope to see them soon.
Thank you for your compliment and correction, Ros :D
Hi again, OnTheEarth. Well done! I would also like to watch some TV series but I do not have time for it. I hope I will have some free time to do it later. Anyway, you have improved a lot, keep up the good work!
Here are some tweaks to your text, please let me know in case you have any questions.
I have (For completed action which is done recently; also, it is relevant to the present.) finished watching American Crime Story season 2.
Season 1 took place mostly in the trial.Most of season 1 happenings were in a court. So I thought season 2 woulddobe the same but it didn't.It was about a murderer who killed several people including Gianni Versace who was a famous fashion designer.
That was why its co-title was 'The Assassination of Gianni Versace'.
I knew Versace
iswas (Verb tenses in a sentence should agree.) a clothes brand. But I didn't know thecreatordesigner was murdered.It is such a shame that we lost this talented person and other victims too.
The story began like from the end of the storyThe story was in reverse chronology. It reminded me of one of Nolan's movies.But I was more impressed by their acting than the story itself, especially the person who played murderer.
Later I found out the actor who played
asthe murderer is actually working as a singer more than as an actor.From what I remember,
his previous acting career was only one, the TV show 'Glee'He only ever starred in the TV show "Glee".I hope to see him more from other movies and TV showsI hope to see more of him in other movies and TV shows.Also, (A comma is required.) I was glad that I could see other familiar faces in the show.
They
playedacted so well that all of them were like they were real.I heard that
otheranother series of American Crime Story will be made. I hope to see them soon.