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Hi Oleks,

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Thank you, Kealin!

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Hi Kealin! Thank you! "Won't be able to" sounds better...

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Hi Ed! Thank you! I will need to learn conditional...

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The Holiday

WHi,my name is Ahmad.I love the holiday,because i will 

travel to canada and visiting my parents , that’s so beautiful.

I will go to the beach , and walking and diving that’s just in the first day.

In the second day i will explore cities and driving ,in the final day i will back to the Jordan 

 

 

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Aliakbar Majidi's picture
I learn : French (Beginner) Persian (Expert) Spanish (Beginner)
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Well done, Ahmad. It seems that you are getting the hang of the English language already. You have improved a lot since you last posted. Keep up the good work! Remember, the more you post and get corrected, the further you improve your English skills. Regarding your text, here is how I would rewrite it, take a look please and let me know if any part is unclear. smiley

 

Hi, my name is Ahmad. I will love the upcoming holiday because I am going to travel to Canada to visit my parents. Canada is so beautiful. I will go to the beach and walk along the beach. I will also go diving and that is just the first day. On the second day, I will explore cities and drive around. On the last day, I will get back to Jordan.

 

  •  “Will” and “be going to” both are used to indicate future tense, however, “be going to” is used for definite plans you have for the future.
  •  For days, we use “on” not “in”. “In” is used for months and years, e.g. in March, in 1997.
  •  Parallel structures: When you use some vocabulary with the same role in the sentence, the form should also be the same, e.g. “go to the beach and walk”, “explore cities and drive”.
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I learn : Chinese (Beginner) French (Beginner) German (Beginner) Portuguese (Beginner) Spanish (Beginner) Arabic (Beginner)
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I learn : Spanish (Intermediate)
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WHi Hi, my name is Ahmad. I love the holiday holidays because i I will travel to canada Canada and visiting  visit my parents. that’s That's so beautiful.

I will go to the beach, and walking and diving that’s just in the first day. I will go to the beach, take a walk and a drive just in the first day.

In the second day i will explore cities and while driving. In On the final last day (final is technically correct, but it does not sound as natural) I will go back to the Jordan 

 

Remember to always capitalize the first letter of each new sentence. Also rememher to capitalize the the first letter of a country.

The word "I" if used in a sentence should always be capitalized. For example: My father and I love to go the the park to run.

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Ros Watson's picture
I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
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Hi Ahmad.  I liked this piece of writing.  It really communicated how much you like holidays!  I have a few changes to make but well done and I hope you post again soon!

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WHi,. mMy name is Ahmad.  I love the holiday holidays [or you could say "I am looking forward to my holiday", because i will 

travel am travelling to canada and visiting my parents.  [Use the present continuous - am travelling - for future plans] , that’s It will be so beautiful.

I will go to the beach , and go walking and diving that’s just in on the first day.

In On the second day i will explore cities and go driving , .  On the final day i will go back to the Jordan.  [Remember to use a capital I for the first person singular, not a small one!].

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