Lingorocks leaderboard

Recent Comments

BeckyGreenBeans's picture

Hi Oleks,

Thanks for this.

Here, you say '...

Sunday, September 15, 2019 - 23:58
BeckyGreenBeans's picture

Hi,

Thanks for this. I can see your creative...

Sunday, September 15, 2019 - 23:35
Oleks's picture

Hi Ed! Thank you for your comment and corrections! I...

Sunday, September 15, 2019 - 19:34
Oleks's picture

Thank you, Kealin! I will try to use shorter sentences...

Sunday, September 15, 2019 - 19:27
Oleks's picture

Hi Ed! At the time I myself was only sitting at the...

Sunday, September 15, 2019 - 19:21

Talking about special trips 1

Talking about very special trips, two weeks ago two friends and I went out for a day trip into the mountains at the south of San Jose. We had been talking for months about doing that and finally we made the decision. As we would rather traveling light, we packed just some water and cold food and setting off for our trip.

 

After had driven for almost and hour we got La Lucha, at San Cristobal, Desamparados. We left our car there and started to hike into the forest. The place is actually not remote, however the locals works hard in order to keep it unspoilt.

 

As I was saying the place were not remote, so we had been able to use our smartphones, the reception, of course, were poorer than in the city, yet the coverage were good enough to have signal most of the time. Otherwise we would felt a bit uncomfortable due to our obsession of been connected so as to send photos to our families and partners on line.

 

Basically we entered the forest hoping to find something special, for that reason we went off the beaten track and started to look into every promising spot, trying to discover a natural treasure.

Undefined
Select Language: 
CategoryAdequate to goodGood to ExcellentNeeds work
Grammatical Accuracy

The learners ability to use nouns, verbs, adjectives, etc. correctly in sentences, using verb tenses accurately, and having the correct agreement between subjects and predicates. For instance, one would say "they were" instead of "they was."

There are 3-4 grammatical errors
People thought this
1
There are 0-2 grammatical errors
People thought this
2
There are 5 or more grammatical errors
People thought this
0
Punctuation

The learner's ability to use certain marks to clarify meaning of their writing by grouping words grammatically into sentences and clauses and phrases.

There are 3-4 errors in capitalization and punctuation.
People thought this
1
There are 0-2 errors in capitalization and punctuation.
People thought this
2
There are 5 or more errors in capitalization and punctuation.
People thought this
0
Spelling

The learners' ability to form words with the correct letters in the correct order

There are 3-4 spelling errors
People thought this
0
There are 0-2 spelling errors
People thought this
3
There are 5 or more spelling errors
People thought this
0
Style

The learner's ability to tailor the written work to fit the specific context, purpose, or audience

Mostly understandable. However, there are a few errors which cause confusion.
People thought this
0
Easy to understand. Writing flows and keeps reader engaged.
People thought this
3
Quite hard to understand.
People thought this
0
Ros Watson's picture
I learn : Italian (Beginner) French (Beginner)
5519

Hi Adrian

You have such a flair for writing! I really love your use of English. As I said in your last text, be careful of the form of the verb "to be": 

I was

You were

He/She/It was

We were

You were 

They were

Talking about very special trips, two weeks ago two friends and I went out for a day trip into the mountains at to the south of San Jose. We had been talking for months about doing that and finally we made the decision. As we would rather traveling light, we just packed just some water and cold food and setting off for our trip.

 

After we had driven for almost and hour we got La Lucha, at San Cristobal, Desamparados. We left our car there and started to hike into the forest. The place is actually not remote,; however the locals works hard in order to keep it unspoilt.

 

As I was saying, the place were was not remote, so we had been able to use our smartphones,  The reception, of course, were was poorer than in the city, yet the coverage were was good enough to have a signal most of the time. Otherwise we would have felt a bit uncomfortable, due to our obsession of  wiith beenbeing connected so as to send photos to our families and partners on line.

 

Basically we entered the forest hoping to find something special, and for that reason we went off the beaten track and started to look into every promising spot, trying to discover a natural treasure.

 

Comment Rating : 
5
Average: 5 (1 vote)
AdrianJZB's picture
I learn : English (Intermediate) Portuguese (Intermediate)
645

Thank yoo Ros, you are right, I have to pay more attention to the use of to be.

Comment Rating : 
0
No votes yet
edhutchins88's picture
I learn : Chinese (Beginner) French (Beginner) German (Beginner) Portuguese (Beginner) Spanish (Beginner) Arabic (Beginner)
5885

Hi Adrian,

I love hiking and like you and your friends, I always try and go off the beaten track and look for places that are unspoilt and remote. The only thing is that I hate hiking when it is very hot and sunny and cannot cope walking in that kind of weather! It must be nice and cool for me to want to go hiking. 

With regards to your English, it is extremely good. I would just like to add the following points...

  • a day trip into the mountains at the south of San Jose a day trip into the mountains to the south of San Jose. [take a look at this link for more information: https://ell.stackexchange.com/questions/134362/to-the-north-of-london-north-of-london-or-in-the-north-of-london]
  • we packed just some water and cold food and setting off for our trip. - [ensure all verbs in this sentence are in the preterite tense, as you are talking about an event in the past] we packed just some water and cold food and set off for our trip
  • As I was saying the place were not remote, so we had been able to use our smartphones ["place" is singular] As I was saying, the place was not remote, so we were able to use our smartphones.
  • As I was saying the place were not remote, so we had been able to use our smartphones, the reception, of course, were poorer than in the city, yet the coverage were good enough to have signal most of the time. [In my opinion, this sentence is too long and needs to be broken up] As I was saying the place was not remote, so we were able to use our smartphones. The reception, of course, was [reception is singular] poorer than it is the city, yet the coverage [coverage is singular too] was good enough for us to have signal most of the time.
  • Otherwise we would felt a bit uncomfortable Otherwise we would have felt a bit uncomfortable. Take a look at this link for more information about the conditional tense: https://www.ef.co.uk/english-resources/english-grammar/conditional/

 

Comment Rating : 
5
Average: 5 (1 vote)
AdrianJZB's picture
I learn : English (Intermediate) Portuguese (Intermediate)
645

Thank you Ed, I have to pay more attention.

Comment Rating : 
0
No votes yet
Aliakbar Majidi's picture
I learn : French (Beginner) Persian (Expert) Spanish (Beginner)
6238

Hi Adrian. It is great to have you back! I agree with Ros, you are really good at writing.

 

Talking about very special trips [You do not need to mention the title again.], two weeks ago two friends and I went out for a day trip into the mountains at the south of in southern San Jose. We had been talking for months about doing that and finally, [comma needed] we made the decision. As we would rather traveling [We would rather do…/I prefer doing…] light, we just packed some water and cold food and [space needed] setting off for our trip.

After had driven driving for almost and an hour, [comma needed] we got to La Lucha, at San Cristobal, Desamparados. We left our car there and started to hike into the forest. The place is actually not remote; however, [comma needed] the locals works hard in order to keep it unspoilt.

As I was saying, [comma needed] the place were was not remote, so we had been able to use our smartphones. [period neededThe reception, of course, were was poorer than (it was) in the city, yet the coverage were was good enough to have signal most of the time. Otherwise, [comma needed] we would have felt a bit uncomfortable due to our obsession of been with being connected so as to send photos to our families and partners on line.

Basically, [comma needed] we entered the forest hoping to find something special [no comma] for that reason, [comma needed] we went off the beaten track and started to look into every promising spot, trying to discover a natural treasure.

 

Rather/prefer/better: http://www.bbc.co.uk/worldservice/learningenglish/grammar/learnit/learnitv107.shtml

Keep up the good work!

Comment Rating : 
0
No votes yet
kjcoffin's picture
I learn : Spanish (Intermediate)
2680

Talking about very special trips, two weeks ago two friends and I went out for a day trip into the mountains at the south of San Jose. We had been talking for months about doing that and finally we made the decision. As we would rather traveling light, we packed just some water and cold food and setting off for our trip.

 

After had driven for almost and hour we got La Lucha, at San Cristobal, Desamparados. We left our car there and started to hike into the forest. The place is actually not remote, however the locals works hard in order to keep it unspoilt.

 

As I was saying, the place were was not remote, so we had been able to use our smartphones. The reception, of course, were was poorer than in the city, yet the coverage were was good enough to have a signal most of the time. Otherwise we would have felt a bit uncomfortable due to our obsession of been being connected so as to that we could send photos to our families and partners online.

 

Basically we entered the forest hoping to find something special, for that reason we went off the beaten track and started to look into every promising spot (no comma) trying to discover a natural treasure.

Comment Rating : 
0
No votes yet